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Question
You are in charge of the publicity at your local arts centre, which is staging a series of cultural events with the following title: "Remembrance of things past". There will be a series of book readings, as well as showings of plays, films and TV programmes from the past whose themes are still relevant today. Your boss has asked you to select a piece of work (from any of the list above) and to write a review that will be given to audience members on the night of the performance. You should include contextual background information as well as an explanation as to why the work is still relevant in today's society:
"Remembrance of things past" - an exhibition of classic works with a contemporary relevance" |
Write the review for inclusion in the programme. (around 280 - 320 words)
Read Francoise's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
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The story is about Tess, a poor but attractive country girl, sent by her parents to visit her presumed noble relations, Alec d'Urberville and his mother. Alec seduces and rapes Tess. T, O Even though the film is set in Victorian Britain, it remains strikingly relevant today as it addresses the long-run WW |
Content
This is a very full and authentic response. You have provided an interesting contextual background and explained the relevance of the work today.
Communicative Achievement
The review is highly engaging and very persuasive. The review would have a very positive impression on the reader.
Organisation
The review is clearly and logically organised. An excellent introduction, a main body paragraph and an effective conclusion. Discourse markers and other cohesive devices have been used satisfactorily to link ideas, though I think in the second paragraph, one or two shorter sentences could have been joined together.
Language
This is a very good piece of writing in terms of your use of English. Very accurate use of grammar and some well-chosen vocabulary throughout. It is written in an engaging style with good use of present tenses to describe events.
Well done!
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